Precision and Economy · seed 1 · A4, ink-friendly. The answer key prints on its own page for grown-ups.
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Shorter, sharper, exact

English · Writing Composition · ages 14-16
Name ______________________   Date ____________
  1. Original: 'The locked cabinet held the records.' A writer deletes 'locked'. What information disappears?

    • The cabinet's contents.
    • The cabinet's locked condition.
    • Where the records were kept.
  2. Which practice combines precision and economy?

    • Adding detail to every noun.
    • Replacing vague words with longer words in every sentence.
    • Choosing exact words and cutting needless repetition.
  3. A writer may invent a specific name to replace 'the thing' when neither the draft nor the notes identifies the object.

    Circle one:   True   False

  4. Notes say a burst pipe flooded the corridor. A draft says, 'The situation was bad.' Which revision states both the noted cause and place without adding facts?

    • The corridor was flooded.
    • A burst pipe flooded the corridor.
    • A burst pipe flooded the corridor and classrooms.
  5. He shut the door with a sudden, forceful bang. Which verb keeps that manner of shutting it?

    • Slammed
    • Closed
    • Opened
  6. A shorter report has lost a date readers need to follow the events. What should the writer do before accepting the cut?

    • Accept the cut because it is shorter.
    • Count words without checking the event order.
    • Restore the needed date after comparing both versions.
  7. Notes say, 'The repair may take two days.' A student revises this to 'The repair will take two days.' What meaning changed?

    • The stated duration changed to a single day.
    • The sentence now describes a different repair.
    • Uncertainty became a definite prediction.
  8. Original: 'The courier checked the address twice, two times, then left while smiling.' Which shorter revision keeps the count, order and expression?

    • The courier checked the address twice, then left smiling.
    • The courier checked the address once, then left smiling.
    • The courier checked the address twice, then left frowning.
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  1. The cabinet's locked condition. · The shortened sentence still identifies the records and where they were kept. It no longer states that the cabinet was locked.
  2. Choosing exact words and cutting needless repetition. · Precision chooses words that fit the intended meaning. Economy removes unnecessary wording.
  3. False · A specific name needs support. Inventing the object's identity adds information rather than clarifying known information.
  4. A burst pipe flooded the corridor. · The faithful revision retains the burst pipe and corridor. One alternative omits the cause; the other adds unsupported classroom flooding.
  5. Slammed · 'Slammed' names forceful shutting with a bang. 'Closed' omits that manner, while 'Opened' changes the action.
  6. Restore the needed date after comparing both versions. · Readers need the date to understand the events. Compare the versions and restore that information even if the revision becomes longer.
  7. Uncertainty became a definite prediction. · 'May' leaves the prediction uncertain. 'Will' presents it definitely. The repair and two-day duration remain the same.
  8. The courier checked the address twice, then left smiling. · The faithful revision removes the repeated count while retaining two checks, departure afterwards and smiling during departure.
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